Thursday, June 3, 2010

Stoep in Rain


Here is my attempt at concrete poetry from many moons ago. I thought it was quite clever at the time. I share it here as an addition to my African tale, as it was written in Port St Johns, South Africa. I  will also include it over at Jingle's to see if anyone appreciates my whimsy at Jingle's Poet's Rally. I will transliterate below;

Green, leafy
STOEP in RAIN.
Pine tree Sprinkled
with moisture
D
   O
      W
          N
at the 
Beach.
Grey clouds
Sque tears ezing
on
ME.
Wet F o o t p r i n t s
Trace 
THE PATH
2
The Toilet Bowl

I spent a lot of time thinking and creativity came back to me a spell while in this tranquil locale. I would suggest it in a heart beat for anyone wishing to travel in a quiet kind of way with nature on your doorstep and all around. 

16 comments:

  1. Now, that is creative, pure genius, I tell ya! Love it!

    ReplyDelete
  2. very creative,
    lovely entry for the Rally,
    Thank you!

    ReplyDelete
  3. absolutely love it.... a wonderful piece of creativity......blessings.....bkm

    ReplyDelete
  4. your poem rocks socks! love how you shaped it...

    ReplyDelete
  5. visit poets to get more feedback,
    have fun!
    Thank you for the beautiful contribution!
    ;)

    ReplyDelete
  6. A fun way with words-- thanks!
    http://mairmusic.wordpress.com/

    ReplyDelete
  7. *Thanks Suzi! Making me blush ;)

    *Glad you like it Ji

    *Nice to meet you BKM. Have seen you in the rally. Thanks for popping by.

    *You make me laugh Brian! You are awesome! Thanks for putting a smile to my face.

    *Awesome of you to pop in Mairmusic. I thought I would share something different. Glad you liked it

    ReplyDelete
  8. I been to Kenya twice can certainly relate to the ending. Loved the creativity!

    ReplyDelete
  9. I love that. It just goes to show how poetry floats between art and writing. It is magical. thanks for the blessing and inspiration. another of my favorites!!!

    alan

    ReplyDelete
  10. *Thanks D.S. Yeah, sometimes in your travels knowing the location of the bathroom is very pertinent!
    *Thanks for coming by Alan. I really had fun with this one. I enjoyed visiting in your world as well. Welcome to the rally.

    ReplyDelete
  11. I loved the color, the form that the poem took, and the simplicity of what was happening in the poem. Well done. Heartspell

    ReplyDelete
  12. Aw, you are sweet Heartspell. Thanks for popping by

    ReplyDelete
  13. http://jingleyanqiu.wordpress.com/2010/05/27/the-celebrate-blogger-of-april-award-announcement-art-humor-short-stories/

    vote if not done so,
    or take the award...

    ReplyDelete
  14. This is simply a masterpiece.
    beautiful and really tough.

    trisha
    http://mydomainpvt.wordpress.com

    ReplyDelete
  15. OMG...this is poem is sooooooooooooo clever!!!

    LOVE your use and play on words...

    "Sque tears ezing"

    BRAVA!

    And that ending is BRILLIANT!

    Thank you for sharing your talents!

    ReplyDelete
  16. *Trisha I am thrilled to meet you. I know that you often get heaped in praise at the rally, so am very pleased that you like my little poem.
    *Thanks Ron. The poem made me giggle then and now.

    ReplyDelete

I love comments. Talk to me!

LinkWithin

Related Posts with Thumbnails