Tuesday, October 5, 2010

my rock

My dear
your birthday nears
thoughts drift to you

once held
in stagnant arms
enfolded life in limbo

slowly rises
with drifting skies
to patch a path

silver linings
bright coloured mittens
a few favourite things
"Let today embrace the past with remembrance and the future with longing"
quote from "The Prophet" by Khalil Gibran

Wednesday shall break in a scant few minutes. I must hasten to bed, but offer up a cinquain poem of hope.
Something I cling to, crave and try to hold in my heart
with memories


  1. Sad, poignant, but also hopeful. The combination of images and emotion are very nice.

  2. i like how you start each stanza witht eh one word...and i love how you finish with hope...that is what we have...for today

  3. Love the uplifting ending and the impact of your lines. Hope is among new fav things, and that is so important. Thank you.

  4. This made me cry. You must miss him terribly. Hope is a beautiful thing.

  5. oh my - this almost made me cry - it must so hurt you and yet your poem is full of hope and peace

  6. Very uplifting thought over the shadow of nostalgia and poignancy....

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  7. * Thanks Ben

    *It is a different style of cinquain poem Brian. Five stanzas with the the first line being 1 word,2nd is 2, 3rd is 3, 4th is 4 and the 5th line is back to one again. Here is a link that someone else shared on their blog one day. http://hrsbstaff.ednet.ns.ca/davidc/6c_files/Poem%20pics/cinquaindescrip.htm
    >hope is all we really have

  8. * Thanks Dustus. Really liked your poem today too. I try to hold onto the positive moments, as sometimes they are fleeting

  9. * Talon and Claudia my life has undergone and is still undergoing drastic changes. The first year he was gone I did nothing but survive. I have been slowly rediscovering life and my place in it, but I do miss him terribly. My life moves on though. He knew that it would even before he died, but I have struggled with what my life should look like. Day by day; I live for the promise of a new day.

  10. It's wonderful to find hope amidst sadness. Nice One Shot!

    By the way, I noticed your flower shots on the right side there. You might enjoy some of the pics I have in my photo blog: Bifocal Univision

  11. I love the way you structured this poem. It really drives the emotions home. Great piece. =3

  12. * I checked out your pics Eric and they are wonderful! I love the angles you shoot from. Thanks for popping by.

    * Hi Nick. Playing with a version of a cinquain poem. I agree with you on the structure though. Thanks.

  13. * Anniversaries fill a year Cindy. I just have to learn to anticipate them and roll with them. I am finding peace in his presence that still lingers.

  14. * Thanks Corrie. Thanksgiving is a double-edged sword, but I will be with family. hugs to you too.

  15. Ah, beautiful, truly! Hope is really all we need to wade through grief. all the best, my friend. Just put my decima up.

  16. Wonderful write...used words magically here. Well done.


  17. Beautiful and touching - and I love the photos - especially the squash growing at the grave, and the hope of renewal. Very lovely.

  18. * Checked your poem out Marilynn and it seems you are struggling with emotions yourself today. Hugs my friend.

  19. * Hi Em. Thanks for stopping by. I appreciate it.

    * Nice to meet you Sherry Blue Sky. I saw those squash as a special present for my little ones. giving back from beyond.

  20. KKridge:

    A very beautiful tribute and remembrance -- lovely photo's, and bittersweet post.



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