tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4266893050917068422.post483553371898972036..comments2024-01-27T05:14:19.071-05:00Comments on A New Day: Not AllKatherine Krigehttp://www.blogger.com/profile/00737873330498032718noreply@blogger.comBlogger14125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4266893050917068422.post-18559138054516323342010-09-03T11:05:22.704-04:002010-09-03T11:05:22.704-04:00Whew-- beautiful! and personal, yet very universal...Whew-- beautiful! and personal, yet very universal. I truly felt this one-- great job!<br />http://mairmusic.wordpress.com/Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4266893050917068422.post-23806671179674733012010-09-02T10:19:41.009-04:002010-09-02T10:19:41.009-04:00"Now,
in my weak and wilted way
I lie down
gi..."Now,<br />in my weak and wilted way<br />I lie down<br />giving up control."<br /><br />What an incredibly beautiful line. In giving up my control, I always seem to discover the most power.<br /><br />Excellent poem!Ronhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15977027331657615697noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4266893050917068422.post-24470520671134193512010-09-02T03:10:07.487-04:002010-09-02T03:10:07.487-04:00nicely written if you can say that about such a su...nicely written if you can say that about such a subject...<br />the following line brought the realism of what you were feeling into play...<br /><br />so inglorious with spit and snot.<br /><br />a very good poem..cheers peteMarshyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08029232967141290634noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4266893050917068422.post-41297987690230942782010-09-02T03:07:48.380-04:002010-09-02T03:07:48.380-04:00even in the break I feel strength. Just like a hea...even in the break I feel strength. Just like a healed broken bone is now stronger.<br /><br />Nicely penned <br />thanks for sharing with One shot<br /><br />Moon Smilesmoondustwriterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09848554806751678968noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4266893050917068422.post-58013146126954479152010-09-01T23:16:24.093-04:002010-09-01T23:16:24.093-04:00Some days it all will seems to come
Too much even ...Some days it all will seems to come<br />Too much even on shoulders strong<br />Broken, sore tears shad overwhelming <br />Control is not in thee for you are one<br />The journey yet done but still gathering <br />Strength for the journey yet takendesk49https://www.blogger.com/profile/05795159954019523527noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4266893050917068422.post-208434743604208502010-09-01T22:01:30.655-04:002010-09-01T22:01:30.655-04:00Nice to meet you Gay and thanks for stopping by to...Nice to meet you Gay and thanks for stopping by today. I too liked how the alliteration flowed in the piece. It gave a little something to the verse that helped it along.Katherine Krigehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00737873330498032718noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4266893050917068422.post-41035696768135418852010-09-01T21:59:14.241-04:002010-09-01T21:59:14.241-04:00A special thank you to Claudia for popping by. I f...A special thank you to Claudia for popping by. I felt that I wanted to throw in my honest thoughts on your poem, but immediately questioned how you would take my critique. I think you are a beautiful poet and it is even more impressive knowing that your poetry comes filtered through a second language. A big old WOW! from me.Katherine Krigehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00737873330498032718noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4266893050917068422.post-92095740474518781452010-09-01T21:54:55.546-04:002010-09-01T21:54:55.546-04:00Have we not all felt the tensions of stress edging...Have we not all felt the tensions of stress edging closer and closer? I often try to run, but you cannot hide. When I cannot take anymore I break. For a long time I felt as if I was failing, but I find release in the moments when I can just admit to myself that I cannot do it all. Tears act as catharsis and somehow lighten the load. Last week had some of that in it. I am finally seeing the Katherine Krigehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00737873330498032718noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4266893050917068422.post-81468537569631579442010-09-01T19:17:44.388-04:002010-09-01T19:17:44.388-04:00there is nothing wrong with an occassional Break!
...there is nothing wrong with an occassional Break!<br />Beautifully writtenG-Manhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14968807697181554781noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4266893050917068422.post-76112176436315833372010-09-01T16:40:59.236-04:002010-09-01T16:40:59.236-04:00I like your use throughout of alliteration. The fl...I like your use throughout of alliteration. The flow of the poem is natural and unveiling. It is as though you begin the unwrapping early and it progresses throughout the day and throughout you sense a little of you is lost with time, a bit you can't recapture and it breaks you a little every day. Nice piece. I enjoyed it. Thanks. GayBeachannyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08638256396472533685noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4266893050917068422.post-39918290429332436262010-09-01T15:49:41.119-04:002010-09-01T15:49:41.119-04:00There's healing in the breaking. And a beauty ...There's healing in the breaking. And a beauty in it, too.TALONhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03205633556998220372noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4266893050917068422.post-7609240443960185702010-09-01T14:40:25.988-04:002010-09-01T14:40:25.988-04:00Katherine - i'm always thankful for feedback o...Katherine - i'm always thankful for feedback on my poems - even more as english is not my first language. Sometimes i make weird mistakes and maybe mix up tenses. So your feedback is very, very welcome!<br /><br />I love your poem about those weak days we all have i guess - you describe the feelings that go with a day like this so, so wellClaudiahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03011763027311966186noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4266893050917068422.post-50947412924036973552010-09-01T14:25:05.608-04:002010-09-01T14:25:05.608-04:00there is a lot of humility in your words k...know ...there is a lot of humility in your words k...know you are not all...and that sometimes you have to break...and stronger you will be because of it...nice one shot!Brian Millerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00722940075884718007noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4266893050917068422.post-23302877440590722842010-09-01T14:14:54.681-04:002010-09-01T14:14:54.681-04:00This is fraught with emotional struggle. It feels ...This is fraught with emotional struggle. It feels a little sad, but I'm not sure that's what it is. It also felt necessary. Powerful piece.PattiKenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02894925987580502697noreply@blogger.com